Striped Tail, Fluffy Tail

&lt;縞尻尾、ふわふわ尻尾&gt;

&lt;Striped Tail, Fluffy Tail&gt;

味: Seems like a 2nd run-through wasn't such a terrible idea after all |D
 * sign here if you think this is good:
 * 汁: I'm fine with this version.
 * 味: (As far as I'm concerned it's) Done (also sorry for erascing your sig Circeus =S)
 * 月: its great.
 * 天: Alright, I'm fine with this too.
 * 天: Made some syntactical adjustments to this chapter and the Reunion chapter according to L.W.'s suggestions (but also took the freedom to disregard some of them that seemed unnecessary or that strayed too far from the original choice of words). Unless there are any objections I will continue to treat this chapter as finished.
 * 味: Agreed, quite a few of those changes turned out for the better but a number were just over the top ^^;
 * 月: yep, a large amount of them seem unnecessary to me but the input is welcomed.

Translated
ミデルの西の方では、石炭を産出する山があり、街の財政を潤している. バストークの若い奴らの中にもそれを稼ぎにしている奴らがいる. ミデルの街に買い物に来た時に仕事帰りの友達に鉢合わせしようものならだいたいが酒場に連れ込まれる.

To the west of Midel lies a mountain where coal is mined, allowing the town to prosper[狼: allowing the town to prosper][電:i agree] [味: Since we seem to agree, I'm just gonna go ahead and change it]. Many young folk from Bastok also work in the mines. When I went shopping in Midel I bumped into a couple of friends that came home from work and was dragged along into a tavern.

[L.W. While I know that you've been trying to keep this in present tense, the last sentence just doesn't sound right to me, and I haven't figured out anyway other than using past tense where it sounds right]

俺はそんなに飲む方じゃないけれど嫌いな訳じゃない. たまに、こんがりと焼いた干し魚でいっぱいいきたいと思うこともある.

I'm not really a big drinker, but that doesn't mean I don't like having a drink. And I hope that they serve lots of grilled stockfish there.


 * 【ティーゲル】「今日は、俺のおごりだ. 　気の済むまで飲ってくれ」
 * 【リック】「どうしたんだよ、そんなに羽振りが　いいなんて」
 * 【マグ】「随分と大きな鉱脈に当たってね. 　特別ボーナスが出たんだよ」
 * 【ティーゲル】「そうだ. いいだろ？　お前もいつまでも漁なんかで細々と　暮らしてないで、俺達と一緒に　働こうぜ」


 * Tiegel: "Today everything's on me. Drink as much as you want!"
 * Rick: "Why so generous today?"
 * Mag: "We found a really big coal vein, you know. Got a special bonus for that."
 * Tiegel: "Yeah! Isn't that great? How long do you want to keep wasting your time as a fisherman? You should join us in the mines and make some real money!"

''[天: Since we're aiming for an english speaking audience, which word would be closest to the pronounciation of ティーゲル in English? (Tiegel, how I'd pronounce it, is German for crucible)]　''

''[狼:Tiegel sounds as good as anything else. It doesn't sound like anything in English, and I think the average American would prounce Tiegel close to correctly. More importantly, aren't they saying fishing doesn't earn him much money, not that it's backbreaking work?] ''

[天: Yeah, it's the 細々と暮らして''　here, meaning "Make a poor living" but I was trying to make it sound good. (another case where I got a good translation in German that's hard to translate into English. ^^" http://www.dict.cc/?s=sich+abrackern]''

[狼:changed it to sound more american]

[天: :P ]

[電:changed fisher to fisherman, although fisher does mean 'one who fishes', fisherman is much more commonly used]

[L.W.: It seems to me that the last line should go something more along the lines of "Yeah! Isn't this great? How long do you plan on wasting your time as a fisherman? You should join us in the mines  and make some real money!" and possibly having the phrase "like a real man" after "the mines" it just seems appropriate to the scene to me]

【リック】「いいよ、俺みたいなのは、　今みたいに細々とでも楽しく　暮らせてりゃ満足なんだから」 正直、俺に肉体労働は似合わない. かといって、ナップみたいに頭がいい訳じゃないから、頭脳労働が似合うわけでもないけれど、 今が楽しく暮らせてるんだから、それで、満足だ. バストークで暮らす分には、お金なんてさほど必要なものではない. 食べ物も住処も自然が授けてくれる.

Rick: "It's alright, fishing may not pay well, but I'm the type of guy that enjoys living this way, I'm happy the way it is." Honestly, manual work just doesn't suit me. Not that mental work really suits me either; I'm not smart like my little brother Napp, but I still enjoy the way my life is right now and I'm happy. Living in Bastok you don't really need money that badly. Food, a roof over your head, you get all that from nature there.

しばらくすると、注文していた酒が運ばれてきて、いよいよ酒宴らしくなる. 俺達の行きつけの酒場では、かわいい女の子が、細い尻尾と腰をくねらせながら、酒を持ってくる.

ジョッキをテーブルに置くとき、ちょうど彼女の柔らかな胸の毛が鼻の先でゆらめき、 ティーゲルは、品もなく口笛なんか吹いてみせる. 女の子もそんなのが当たり前だから、軽くウインクであしらうのだ.

Shortly after, the booze we ordered arrives and things are turning into a drinking bout. In this bar the waitresses are all cute girls, with thin tails wrapped around their hips.

While putting the steins down on the table the soft hairtuft on the girl's breasts waves right in front of our noses and Tiegel whistles lewdly. The girls here are used to it and she answers with a light wink.

[電:"a drinking bout" is driving me insane, can someone please help me think of a way to rephrase that?]

[月'': you could make it "drinking contest" or something, it depends on the atmosphere but i think thats the appropriate one, there aren't many words that can replace drinking without going into slang, which wouldn't be understood by everyone; only the people who use that slang. if you don't think that's right either you could play around with a thesaurus and try and get the right combination of words' http://thesaurus.reference.com/ ][味:Either we can use "contest", "competition", or "bout"... your guys' call. Personally it doesn't bother me]''

[L.W. you could always just state "and people are starting to get drunk" also in this tense waves rather than is waving is more appropriate]

せっかくのおごりだというので、俺は好物の焼き魚と野菜の酢漬けと、新ジャガとそぼろの煮っ転がし、そして、マスのパイ包みを頼む. 【マグ】「くはあっ！　うまいな！　やっぱり働いた後のこのいっぱいは　最高だよ」 マグがジョッキを一気に空けて口元の泡を拭う.

Since I haven't eaten anything fancy in a while, I'm ordering my favorite dish: fried fish, pickled vegetables, fresh potatoes and a fried mincemeat roll with soy sauce, as well as a trout pot pie.

Mag: "Aaah-! That's good! A big mug of beer after work is the greatest thing after all!"

''[味: Kuhaa? I think "Ah" would work] [天: Alright.]''

Mag empties the whole stein in one go and wipes the foam away.

''[天: Since 包み means "package" I've translated it as "take away" here. I'm just assuming he wants to give that fish pie to his brother. But maybe 包み is referring to a special pastry technique of something. We'll have to wait and see if that pie turns up again in the next chapter... and now I'm hungry -.-"][電:changed take away to take-out, assuming its packaged to take home/to his brother][天: Ok due to the "Home Cooking" chapter it seems like it really is just a kind of pie.] [味: Maybe trout POT pie? :P][天: After looking it up in a cookbook, yeah I think that's what he means. XD][味: @ Amarao: In a later chapter, you mentioned you DON'T think it's pot pie. Are you still thinking that?] [天: I don't know what I'm thinking anymore -.-""" but I think it's ok like this, isn't it? ^^"""][味: I completely think so, but since you pointed it out in a later chapter, I just started wondering, that's all ^^; Also, gotta go through and finish the run |3]''


 * 【リック】「ふぅ、なんか酒ってのは　飲むと、生きてるーって感じが　するよなぁ」
 * 【ティーゲル】「おおよ. だからやめられないんだよな. 　ほら、リック、もっと飲めよ. 　姉ちゃん、俺とこいつにお代わり！」

ティーゲルはそう言って、俺の返事も聞かずに次のジョッキを注文していた.


 * Rick: "Whew, a good beer like that really makes you feel alive, right?"
 * Tiegel: "You bet! And that's why you just can't stop after one. C'mon Rick, have another. Hey lil' sweetie, another round for me and my friend here!"

With these words Tiegel orders another mug of beer for me without waiting for my answer.

二人とも、ほろ酔い気分で頬を紅く染め、がぶがぶと、まるで底なしかのように、飲んでいた. ふわふわの毛の尻尾も今はだらしなく垂れ下がっていた.

【？？？】「随分ご機嫌だなぁ」 不意に俺達に話しかける声があった. 【ティーゲル】「ん？　なんか用か？」 ティーゲルがだらしなく笑いながら、声がした方に顔を向ける.

そこには、２人組の男達がニヤニヤと笑いながら立っていて、俺達３人を見下ろしていた. 【？？？】「いや、別に？　くさい匂いがしたもんでな」 【ティーゲル】「なんだと！？」 ティーゲルが、がたんと音を立てて立ち上がる.

The two of us, our faces red from all the beer, are gulping down one mug after the other without end. Even our fluffy tails are hanging down lazily.

???: "We sure are in a good mood, aren't we?" We hear a voice say.

Tiegel: "Hm? Ya want something?" Tiegel answers flippantly and laughs as he looks over to the stranger.

A pair of guys is standing in front of our table, laughing as they look down on us three.


 * ???: "Nyahaha. Oh, nothing! I just couldn't help but notice that awful stench of yours."
 * Tiegel: "What!?" He barks at the two and stands up from his seat.

''[天: Since "laughing with a nyanya" sounds weird I'm adding a "Nyahaha" to the following direct speech. ] [狼:good call]''

[L.W.: I'm not trying to be mean, but never ever use a phrase such as "some unknown guy" it's epically bad form, and makes you sound like you don't know what you're talking about. It would have been just fine as some guy, or "we hear a voice say".]

【？？？】「バストークの連中のくさい匂いだ」 ２人組の男達はクククと嫌な笑いを浮かべながらそう言った. 【マグ】「誰かと思えば、縞尻尾の連中じゃないか」 先が縞模様の尻尾を持った２人組. ザパトの村の連中だ.

ザパトの村は、大きな川を挟んでバストークの反対側にある村だ. 昔からバストークとザパトは対立していて、ことあるごとに争い、諍いを続けていたのだ.

理由はというと、どちらの村の人間もわからないくらい昔から仲違いをしていてはっきりしていない. ただ、どちらにしてもくだらない理由だろう. ２つの村があまりに争いを起こすので、俺が生まれる何年か前に法王庁によって村をつなぐ大橋は落とされた.

???: "It's the stench of a guy from Bastok." The two start to laugh in a sinister way.''[汁: In a strange way???] [味: Sinister maybe?] [天: Hmhm~ good. ^^]''

Mag: "Well look whose here, some striped tails." The two have a striped pattern at the tip of their tails. They are from Zapat.

Zapat is a village in the fork of a big river, just on the other side of Bastok. For ages there has been a feud between Bastok and Zapat, with confrontations at every opportunity; the fighting goes on and on.

The reason for that feud has long been forgotten by the citizens of both villages, nobody really knows why they never get along. Whatever it was, I'm sure it was a stupid reason to begin with. The Holy Order tore down the bridge connecting the two cities, because of the on-going quarrels, a few years after I was born.

[天: By the way if you mean "order" as in "holy order" do you capitalize it?] 

[汁: Guess we might as well.] 

[狼:we should probably use the full name to make sure no one gets confused]

''[電: is "as one of them says that" really necessary? we know one of them said it] ''

[天: yeah, I think we can do that ^^"]

[L.W.: Line 1 The phrase is generally "Well look whose here" and that last sentence of the last paragraph I think would sound better as "The Holy Order tore down the bridge connecting the two cities, because of the on-going quarrels, a few years after I was born"]

２つの村に住む人たちには、それぞれ尻尾に特徴があって、俺達バストークの人間は、先がふわふわの尻 尾. ザパトの人間は、縞模様の尻尾をしている. だから、バストークの人間は、ザパトの村の連中を『縞尻尾』だなんて侮蔑した呼び方をしている. ザパトの連中も、やはり同じように俺達のことを『ふわふわ尻尾』と呼び、その可愛らしい呼び方が逆にムカつくのだ.

The citizens of both villages each have tails with special traits. People from Bastok have tails that are all fluffy at the end. Those from Zapat have a stripe pattern on theirs. That's why we derisively call the villagers of Zapat "striped tails". People from Zapat in return got a nick name for us too, "fluffy tails", [汁: Real original &gt;__&gt;;;] and nothing pisses us off more than that awfully cute name.

[L.W.: I would change "Us guys" to We, and "People" to Those]

【縞尻尾１】「そのふわふわの毛はお洒落か？　可愛いじゃねえか」 【ティーゲル】「てめぇらッ！」 途端にティーゲルが縞尻尾のやつらに掴みかかる. そして、それを待ってましたと言わんばかりに掴み返す縞尻尾.

Stiped Tail 1: "Are those fluffy tails in fashion now? Aw, aren't you the cutest."

Tiegel: "You bastard-!"

He yanks the striped tail. And it goes without saying that he gets his yanked back.

[汁: "Grab?"] [味: Let's try yanked]

ティーゲルは、相手を掴んだまま殴り倒す. 縞尻尾のにやけていた顔が険しく変わり、血管を浮き上がらせてティーゲルに飛びかかる.

【マグ】「お前もだろッ！」 マグがもう一人の縞尻尾を掴んで、そのまま、殴りつける. 【縞尻尾２】「ぐうっ！」 俺はそれを見ていた.

Tiegel beats his opponent to the ground. The surprised look in the striped tail's face turns into a sharp one, a vein pops up in his face and he sends Tiegel flying.

Mag: "Now you're gonna get it too-!" Mag grabs the other striped tail and starts beating him up.

Striped Tail 2: "Guh-!"

I just idly look on.

[電:'sissy look'?] 

''[天: Yeah, that one is giving me a headache too. I meant something between "soft" and "silly". にやける means "to be effeminate; to be a fop", and Spacealc translates the negation of that word as "Wipe that look of your face!" (http://eow.alc.co.jp/にやける), but I don't know what to call "that look".]''

[月:could make it worried/dismayed/fearful look and if i've read it correctly surprised might fit the context.]

''[天: I think surprised is maybe the best way to put it here. It's not literal, but it fits the situation very well.]''

[月'': also just thought of startled, dizzy, jolted, shocked or stunned. I don't know why I didn't think of them before; probably needed sleep, might be better than surprised.]''

[味: Would "I just idly look on" work here?]

[天: well it doesn't say so in the text, but that would fit the picture in the game at that point.]

[L.W. That first sentence would sound better as "his opponent" rather than "the guy he grabbed". And on rather than in]

ケンカなんてする気になれなかった. 得意でないのもあるけれど、縞尻尾の連中とのケンカほど無意味なものはないと思った. 俺は、ジョッキを片手にケンカを眺めた.

【リック】「俺はやらねーからな」 俺は、聞こえてるのか聞こえてないのかわからなかったけれど、そう言って、傍観者を決め込んだ. 目の前で、友達２人が縞尻尾の連中と殴り合っている.

I'm not in the mood for a fight. While I'm not exactly strong, I also see how pointless these fights with the striped tails are. With the stein in one hand, I continue watching the fight.

''[味: About the sentence starting with "It's not exactly easy to insult me...", if you are going to use "but" you have to change one of the sentences so that they don't go hand-in-hand, otherwise you would be using "and". Maybe you meant to say "While it's not exactly hard to insult me"?]''

[天: Ah, it seems I misinterpreted 得意でないのも, ''he wants to say that he's physically weak. That also makes more sense that way since in the later chapters he gets mad rather easily. Does it work out now?'']'

''[味: Still kinda iffy, but only because you're using the "one hand/other hand" analogy. That's usually used when you are comparing two things that normally aren't the same or don't end up with the same conclusion. In this sentence, Rick is giving evidence in BOTH cases why he isn't getting involved in the fight, therefore both those statements support his stance of why he is not joining the fight. I tried fixing it up, let me know what you think]''

Rick: "Leave me out of this." I don't know if anyone can hear me but I'm saying it anyway and try to act like an innocent bystander. In front of my eyes my two friends and those striped tails are beating each other up.

【縞尻尾１】「ぐあっ・・・！」 ティーゲルの爪が縞尻尾の頬を引き裂く. 俺達だってバカじゃないから、自分達の牙や爪が、間違えば人を殺してしまうくらいの力を持っていることを知っている. だから、滅多なことでは、噛みついたり、引っ掻いたりはしない.

【ティーゲル】「・・・んの野郎ッ！」 それでも、ティーゲルみたいについ爪が出てしまったのは、それだけ縞尻尾相手に激昂しているのだろう. 【マグ】「ッあぁ！」 縞尻尾のやつが、マグの肩に噛み付いている.

Striped Tail 1: "Guah-...!" Tiegel's claws rip the face of the striped tail apart. We're not idiots, it's common sense that the claws and fangs of us guys from Bastok are strong enough to kill anybody that provokes us. That's why we don't bite or scratch anybody thoughtlessly.

Tiegel: "... Nh- you bastard!" Nonetheless, the fact that even a guy like Tiegel got his claws out right away shows how much the striped tails are pissing us off. Mag: "-Aah!" The other striped tail has bitten Mag in his shoulder.

''[味: Why is "us" being used if Rick is clearly not in the fight? Also changed "ticking" to "pissing" and "that even a guy" to "if even a guy"] ''

''[天: I think "Us" means "us guys from Bastok" here (which is why he includes himself), maybe we should add that. Come to think of it... due to a later scene mentioning the strength of their claws here makes a lot of sense.]''

[L.W.: I think that "if" would be more appropriately replaced with the phrase "the fact that"

あいつらから仕掛けてきたとはいえ、負けるわけにいかないケンカだ. ・・・理由のない戦い. お互いが何かをしたわけではない. ただ、気に入らないから、ただ、バストークの村に住んでいるから、ただ、ザパトに住んでいるから.

そこにいることが気に入らないからケンカを仕掛ける. たとえ、勝ったにしてもスッキリなんてしない.

From the beginning it was clear that this wasn't a fight either side would allow themselves to lose... a fight without reason. Neither of them knowing why. It's just that they can't stand each other, it's just that they live in Bastok and the others in Zapat.

It all comes down to hate. It's the only reason they're fighting. Even if winning that fight won't change a damn thing.

[天: Maybe I'm getting a little carried away here ^^". Just change it to "anything" if you think it's better.] [狼:it sounds good to me][月: it suits the mood] [味: Pretty good, just a few grammatical changes][味: Just gotta mention this was a very nice dramatic effect here; a good way of polishing off the sentence, it really drives the point home. Good job on that Ama~]''

もとから遺恨があるわけでもないのだから、勝ったところでなにも変わらないのだ. 相も変わらず、憎しみだけが残り続ける. お互いの村はお互いを忌み嫌い、ふわふわの毛だの、縞尻尾だのと蔑み合いながら日々過ごすのだ. ・・・くだらない.

もし.

There's no way that this hate could have always been there, and that's why winning won't change anything. As usual some of that hate would remain. The two villages hate each other. They hate the fluffy tail or the striped one. And fueled by that, the hatred lives on day after day... it's so ridiculous.

What if...

[汁: "fulfilled" ??][電:look better now?]

もし、あの雲の向こうにある世界にたどり着くことができたなら、そこはどんな世界なのだろう. できれば、くだらない争いのない世界がいい.

いつも、楽しく仕事ができて、いつもうまいご飯を食べることができて、 家族やコイビトと笑って暮らせる世界がいい. たとえ、そうでなくても、きっとここよりはいい世界であって欲しい.

What if I could go beyond those clouds, how would that world be, I wonder? If it's possible, I wish for it to be a world without pointless fighting.

I hope that it's a world where people can always work happily together, where they can share tasty meals with each other and were they can spend their days surrounded by their family and loved ones. And even if all of that can't be true in that place, I still hope for it to be a better world.

''[天: I've added a "together" and a "share" since, that people are so torn apart in the place he lives is what he hates so much. I think it sounds better this way, then just the original "always work, always eat, etc." sentence.] [狼:yeah, a literal translation wouldn't have very much impact. I like how you did it][汁: I replaced "wish" with "hope". Given he doesn't know anything at all about the outside world, "wish" sounds just weird.]''

[味: Just changed "stupid fights" to "pointless fighting"]

【ティーゲル】「リック！　お前も手伝えよ！」 ティーゲルが歯をギリギリとならしながら俺の方を睨んだ. ケンカを見ていた別の縞尻尾が加勢してきて、２人は劣勢になっていた.

【リック】「俺はいいよ・・・. 勝手にやってくれ」 俺はぐいとジョッキを呷ってそう言った. 別に俺がケンカに入ったところで何もかわらない. ただ殴られ損になるだけだ.

Tiegel: "Rick! Come here and help us!"

He is staring at me and grinding his teeth. While I had been watching the fight some other striped tails came to help the first two. Tiegel and Mag are outnumbered.

Rick: "None of my business... You're on your own." I say that as I take a deep gulp from the stein. Whether or not I join in on the fight wouldn't change anything anyways. I'd just get a beating.

[電:Changed "suit yourselves" to "you're on your own", thats not really a situation where you would use 'suit yourselves'] [天: Works out too.]

ティーゲルもマグも屈強だから、少々殴られたり噛みつかれたとしてもそうそう死にはしないだろう. 店の方では、止めようとするも、大して効果はないし、周りがケンカは酒場の華とばかりに騒ぐものだからいっこうに静まる気配を見せない.

まったくあきれ返る. いつまでもこんなくだらない争いをしている村なんて捨てて、新しい世界に飛び出したい. 俺は、飛行機に乗って、外世界に飛び出している自分を想像しながら、ぐいとジョッキを飲み干した.

Both Tiegel and Mag are built pretty sturdily, so I figure a little beating and biting isn't going to kill them. Even if the barkeep would like to stop them, it's not really a big deal, you'll get fights in a tavern like weeds in a garden, so you're unlikely to see all the ruckus in the bar die down at once.

[天: I'm so not sure if I got what this sentence wants to tell me O.o"] [狼:my guess is 酒場の華 is an idiom that means that fights grow in bars like flowers. An equivalent american idiom might be "fights are a tavern's bread and butter", though there's probably a better one I can't think of at the moment.][汁: Somehow I want to compare the fights to weeds...]'[月: not sure if there is a right way to change it, but maybe like '汁 thought, "fights grow in taverns like weeds in a garden, so you're unlikely (etc.)" or something, that line is hard.] [天: Yeah, idioms like that are always hard to translate. To me the weeds idea sounds better than the bread an butter idea, tho. ^^"] [味: Props to whoever got that idiom]

Jeez it's really astonishing. I'd gladly leave this village and all this pointless fighting behind me and fly off to that new world. As I picture myself flying off to the other world, I gulp down what's left in my stein.

[L.W. I would use "as " rather than "while" and "finish off" rather than "gulp down"]

【リック】「お前ら、いい加減にしろよー」 酒もなくなり、そろそろ殴り合いを見ているのもイヤになってくる. 【縞尻尾１】「ぐ・・・ぬ・・・ぅ」 【ティーゲル】「くふぅ・・・く・・・」 結局、しばらく経って、お互いが立っていられなくなってケンカが終わった.

ティーゲルもマグもぶっ倒れ、店のテーブルも椅子もぶっ壊れた. 本当にすまない、と謝ると、 修理代さえきちんと出してくれれば、ケンカなんて、派手でいい、 と樽のように太い腕のあちらこちらに古傷を抱えたマスターが言った.

Rick: "You two, stop fooling around already-!" Since I've run out of beer, I'm also losing my interest in watching them fight.

Striped Tail 1: "Guh... nuh... uh" Tiegel: "Phew... Nng..." It's taken a while, but finally none of them can stand up anymore, so the fight is over.

Tiegel and Mag are completely trashed, just like the bar's chairs and tables. "I'm really sorry" and "Please excuse this" and "As long as you pay the repair costs, a fight isn't bad at all" I hear the barkeep say. He's as round as a barrel with arms full of old scars.

[L.W. "I've lost" as opposed to "I am losing" sounds better to me]

俺はティーゲルのボーナスとやらを懐から探って、店の修理代だとマスターに差し出した. その後の縞尻尾の連中はどうなったか知らないけれど、俺は２人を引きずって街の噴水の前まで来た.

こんなケンカばかりの街が嫌いだから外世界に行く、なんてちょっとカッコ悪い. けれど、俺は逃げ出す訳じゃなく、その向こうに新しい世界を見つけにいくんだ. 父さんと同じように.

父さんは、どんな気持ちで飛行機を飛ばしたんだろうか.

俺は、白く輝く月を見上げて、 【リック】「いつか、俺の夢のために　卑しく空を侵すかもしれないけれど　その時は、どうか大目に見てください」 と、珍しく手のひらを合わせながら、お祈りをしてみた.

I search Tiegel's breast pocket for his bonus money and hand it to the barkeep to pay for the damages. I don't know what the striped tails are going to do about this. I just leave the bar, dragging the two behind me until I reach the town's fountain.

Leaving this place I hate to go to a new world makes me look like a coward. But it's not like I'm running away, I'm going there to explore that new world. Just like my father.

[狼:changed "not cool" to "coward", so it makes more sense.]

I wonder how dad felt as he took off back then.

I look up to the white moon in the night sky.

Rick: "One day, to fulfill my dream, I will have to break into your sky. And when that time comes, please turn a blind eye to it." I put my hands against each other and say a prayer, something I rarely do.

''[味: I've noticed a lot of run-on sentences, and I know it's because of the original wording, so I'm not trying to call out anybody. So I'm asking: should I try to fix other run-on sentences as well?]''

[L.W. The 3rd sentence Needs a transitory statement at the beginning such as "So". And put a comma after hate]

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'''[天: A little note for you Komi-kun. When you put this into the game watch out, the formating was completely destroyed by wikipedia here.]'''

ミデルの西の方では、石炭を産出する山があり、街の財政を潤している. バストークの若い奴らの中にもそれを稼ぎにしている奴らがいる. ミデルの街に買い物に来た時に仕事帰りの友達に鉢合わせしようものならだいたいが酒場に連れ込まれる.

To the west of Midel lies a mountain where coal is mined, allowing the town to prosper. Many young folk from Bastok also work in the mines. When I went shopping in Midel I bumped into a couple of friends that came home from work and was dragged along into a tavern.

俺はそんなに飲む方じゃないけれど嫌いな訳じゃない. たまに、こんがりと焼いた干し魚でいっぱいいきたいと思うこともある.

I'm not really a big drinker, but that doesn't mean I don't like having a drink. And I hope that they serve lots of grilled stockfish there.

【ティーゲル】「今日は、俺のおごりだ. 気の済むまで飲ってくれ」

【リック】「どうしたんだよ、そんなに羽振りが　いいなんて」

【マグ】「随分と大きな鉱脈に当たってね. 特別ボーナスが出たんだよ」

【ティーゲル】「そうだ. いいだろ？　お前もいつまでも漁なんかで細々と　暮らしてないで、俺達と一緒に　働こうぜ」

Tiegel: "Today everything's on me. Drink as much as you want!"

Rick: "Why so generous today?"

Mag: "We found a really big coal vein, you know. Got a special bonus for that."

Tiegel: "Yeah! Isn't that great? How long do you want to keep wasting your time as a fisherman? You should join us in the mines and make some real money!"

【リック】「いいよ、俺みたいなのは、　今みたいに細々とでも楽しく　暮らせてりゃ満足なんだから」 正直、俺に肉体労働は似合わない. かといって、ナップみたいに頭がいい訳じゃないから、頭脳労働が似合うわけでもないけれど、 今が楽しく暮らせてるんだから、それで、満足だ. バストークで暮らす分には、お金なんてさほど必要なものではない. 食べ物も住処も自然が授けてくれる.

Rick: "It's alright, fishing may not pay well, but I'm the type of guy that enjoys living this way, I'm happy the way it is."

Honestly, manual work just doesn't suit me. Not that mental work really suits me either; I'm not smart like my little brother Napp, but I still enjoy the way my life is right now and I'm happy. Living in Bastok you don't really need money that badly. Food, a roof over your head, you get all that from nature there.

しばらくすると、注文していた酒が運ばれてきて、いよいよ酒宴らしくなる. 俺達の行きつけの酒場では、かわいい女の子が、細い尻尾と腰をくねらせながら、酒を持ってくる. ジョッキをテーブルに置くとき、ちょうど彼女の柔らかな胸の毛が鼻の先でゆらめき、 ティーゲルは、品もなく口笛なんか吹いてみせる. 女の子もそんなのが当たり前だから、軽くウインクであしらうのだ.

Shortly after, the booze we ordered arrives and things are turning into a drinking bout. In this bar the waitresses are all cute girls, with thin tails wrapped around their hips. While putting the steins down on the table the soft hairtuft on the girl's breasts waves right in front of our noses and Tiegel whistles lewdly. The girls here are used to it and she answers with a light wink.

せっかくのおごりだというので、俺は好物の焼き魚と野菜の酢漬けと、新ジャガとそぼろの煮っ転がし、そして、マスのパイ包みを頼む. 【マグ】「くはあっ！　うまいな！　やっぱり働いた後のこのいっぱいは　最高だよ」 マグがジョッキを一気に空けて口元の泡を拭う.

Since I haven't eaten anything fancy in a while, I'm ordering my favorite dish: fried fish, pickled vegetables, fresh potatoes and a fried mincemeat roll with soy sauce, as well as a trout pot pie.

Mag: "Aaah-! That's good! A big mug of beer after work is the greatest thing after all!"

Mag empties the whole stein in one go and wipes the foam away.

【リック】「ふぅ、なんか酒ってのは　飲むと、生きてるーって感じが　するよなぁ」

【ティーゲル】「おおよ. だからやめられないんだよな. ほら、リック、もっと飲めよ. 姉ちゃん、俺とこいつにお代わり！」

ティーゲルはそう言って、俺の返事も聞かずに次のジョッキを注文していた.

Rick: "Whew, a good beer like that really makes you feel alive, right?"

Tiegel: "You bet! And that's why you can't just stop after one beer. C'mon Rick, have another one. Hey lil' sweetie, another round for me and my friend here!"

With these words Tiegel orders another mug of beer for me without waiting for my answer.

二人とも、ほろ酔い気分で頬を紅く染め、がぶがぶと、まるで底なしかのように、飲んでいた. ふわふわの毛の尻尾も今はだらしなく垂れ下がっていた. 【？？？】「随分ご機嫌だなぁ」 不意に俺達に話しかける声があった. 【ティーゲル】「ん？　なんか用か？」 ティーゲルがだらしなく笑いながら、声がした方に顔を向ける. そこには、２人組の男達がニヤニヤと笑いながら立っていて、俺達３人を見下ろしていた. 【？？？】「いや、別に？　くさい匂いがしたもんでな」 【ティーゲル】「なんだと！？」 ティーゲルが、がたんと音を立てて立ち上がる.

The two of us, our faces red from all the beer, are gulping down one mug after the other without end. Even our fluffy tails are hanging down lazily.

???: "We sure are in a good mood, aren't we?" We hear a voice say.

Tiegel: "Hm? Ya want something?" Tiegel answers flippantly and laughs as he looks over to the stranger.

A pair of guys is standing in front of our table, laughing as they look down on us three.

???: "Nyahaha. Oh, nothing! I just couldn't help but notice that awful stench of yours."

Tiegel: "What!?" He barks at the two and stands up from his seat.

【？？？】「バストークの連中のくさい匂いだ」 ２人組の男達はクククと嫌な笑いを浮かべながらそう言った. 【マグ】「誰かと思えば、縞尻尾の連中じゃないか」 先が縞模様の尻尾を持った２人組. ザパトの村の連中だ. ザパトの村は、大きな川を挟んでバストークの反対側にある村だ. 昔からバストークとザパトは対立していて、ことあるごとに争い、諍いを続けていたのだ. 理由はというと、どちらの村の人間もわからないくらい昔から仲違いをしていてはっきりしていない. ただ、どちらにしてもくだらない理由だろう. ２つの村があまりに争いを起こすので、俺が生まれる何年か前に法王庁によって村をつなぐ大橋は落とされた.

???: "It's the stench of a guy from Bastok." The two start to laugh in a sinister way. Mag: "Well look whose here, some striped tails." The two have a striped pattern at the tip of their tails. They are from Zapat.

Zapat is a village in the fork of a big river, just on the other side of Bastok. For ages there has been a feud between Bastok and Zapat, there have been confrontations at every opportunity, the fighting goes on and on. The reason for that feud has long been forgotten by the citizens of both villages, nobody really knows why they never get along. Whatever it was, I'm sure it was a stupid reason to begin with. The Holy Order tore down the bridge connecting the two cities, because of the on-going quarrels, a few years after I was born.

２つの村に住む人たちには、それぞれ尻尾に特徴があって、俺達バストークの人間は、先がふわふわの尻 尾. ザパトの人間は、縞模様の尻尾をしている. だから、バストークの人間は、ザパトの村の連中を『縞尻尾』だなんて侮蔑した呼び方をしている. ザパトの連中も、やはり同じように俺達のことを『ふわふわ尻尾』と呼び、その可愛らしい呼び方が逆にムカつくのだ.

The citizens of both villages each have tails with special traits. People from Bastok have tails that are all fluffy at the end. Those from Zapat have a stripe pattern on theirs. That's why we derisively call the villagers of Zapat "striped tails". People from Zapat in return got a nick name for us too, "fluffy tails", and nothing pisses us off more than that awfully cute name.

【縞尻尾１】「そのふわふわの毛はお洒落か？　可愛いじゃねえか」 【ティーゲル】「てめぇらッ！」 途端にティーゲルが縞尻尾のやつらに掴みかかる. そして、それを待ってましたと言わんばかりに掴み返す縞尻尾.

Stiped Tail 1: "Are those fluffy tails in fashion now? Aw, aren't you the cutest." Tiegel: "You bastard-!" He yanks the striped tail. And it goes without saying that he gets his yanked back.

ティーゲルは、相手を掴んだまま殴り倒す. 縞尻尾のにやけていた顔が険しく変わり、血管を浮き上がらせてティーゲルに飛びかかる. 【マグ】「お前もだろッ！」 マグがもう一人の縞尻尾を掴んで、そのまま、殴りつける. 【縞尻尾２】「ぐうっ！」 俺はそれを見ていた.

Tiegel beats his opponent to the ground. The surprised look in the striped tail's face turns into a sharp one, a vein pops up in his face and he sends Tiegel flying. Mag: "Now you're gonna get it too-!" Mag grabs the other striped tail and starts beating him up. Striped Tail 2: "Guh-!"

I just idly look on.

ケンカなんてする気になれなかった. 得意でないのもあるけれど、縞尻尾の連中とのケンカほど無意味なものはないと思った. 俺は、ジョッキを片手にケンカを眺めた. 【リック】「俺はやらねーからな」 俺は、聞こえてるのか聞こえてないのかわからなかったけれど、そう言って、傍観者を決め込んだ. 目の前で、友達２人が縞尻尾の連中と殴り合っている.

I'm not in the mood for a fight. While I'm not exactly strong, I also see how pointless these fights with the striped tails are. With the stein in one hand, I continue watching the fight.

Rick: "Leave me out of this." I don't know if anyone can hear me but I'm saying it anyway and try to act like an innocent bystander. In front of my eyes my two friends and those striped tails are beating each other up.

【縞尻尾１】「ぐあっ・・・！」 ティーゲルの爪が縞尻尾の頬を引き裂く. 俺達だってバカじゃないから、自分達の牙や爪が、間違えば人を殺してしまうくらいの力を持っていることを知っている. だから、滅多なことでは、噛みついたり、引っ掻いたりはしない. 【ティーゲル】「・・・んの野郎ッ！」 それでも、ティーゲルみたいについ爪が出てしまったのは、それだけ縞尻尾相手に激昂しているのだろう. 【マグ】「ッあぁ！」 縞尻尾のやつが、マグの肩に噛み付いている.

Striped Tail 1: "Guah-...!" Tiegel's claws rip the face of the striped tail apart. We are no idiots, it's common sense that the claws and fangs of us guys from Bastok are strong enough to kill anybody that provokes us. That's why we don't bite or scratch anybody thoughtlessly. Tiegel: "... Nh- you bastard!" Nonetheless, the fact that even a guy like Tiegel got his claws out right away shows how much the striped tail are pissing us off. Mag: "-Aah!" The other striped tail has bitten Mag in his shoulder.

あいつらから仕掛けてきたとはいえ、負けるわけにいかないケンカだ. ・・・理由のない戦い. お互いが何かをしたわけではない. ただ、気に入らないから、ただ、バストークの村に住んでいるから、ただ、ザパトに住んでいるから. そこにいることが気に入らないからケンカを仕掛ける. たとえ、勝ったにしてもスッキリなんてしない.

From the beginning it was clear that this wasn't a fight either side would allow themselves to lose... a fight without reason. Neither of them knowing why. It's just that they can't stand each other, it's just that they live in Bastok and the others in Zapat. It all comes down to hate. It's the only reason they're fighting. Even if winning that fight won't change a damn thing.

もとから遺恨があるわけでもないのだから、勝ったところでなにも変わらないのだ. 相も変わらず、憎しみだけが残り続ける. お互いの村はお互いを忌み嫌い、ふわふわの毛だの、縞尻尾だのと蔑み合いながら日々過ごすのだ. ・・・くだらない. もし.

There's no way that this hate could have always been there, and that's why winning won't change anything. As usual some of that hate would remain. The two villages hate each other. They hate the fluffy tail or the striped one. And fueled by that, the hatred lives on day after day... it's so ridiculous. What if...

もし、あの雲の向こうにある世界にたどり着くことができたなら、そこはどんな世界なのだろう. できれば、くだらない争いのない世界がいい. いつも、楽しく仕事ができて、いつもうまいご飯を食べることができて、 家族やコイビトと笑って暮らせる世界がいい. たとえ、そうでなくても、きっとここよりはいい世界であって欲しい.

What if I could go beyond those clouds, how would that world be, I wonder? If it's possible, I wish for it to be a world without pointless fighting. I hope that it's a world where people can always work happily together, where they can share tasty meals with each other and were they can spend their days surrounded by their family and loved ones. And even if all of that can't be true in that place, I still hope for it to be a better world.

【ティーゲル】「リック！　お前も手伝えよ！」 ティーゲルが歯をギリギリとならしながら俺の方を睨んだ. ケンカを見ていた別の縞尻尾が加勢してきて、２人は劣勢になっていた. 【リック】「俺はいいよ・・・. 勝手にやってくれ」 俺はぐいとジョッキを呷ってそう言った. 別に俺がケンカに入ったところで何もかわらない. ただ殴られ損になるだけだ.

Tiegel: "Rick! Come here and help us!" He is staring at me and grinding his teeth. While I had been watching the fight some other striped tails came to help the first two. Tiegel and Mag are outnumbered. Rick: "None of my business... You're on your own." I say that as I take a deep gulp from the stein. Whether or not I join in on the fight wouldn't change anything anyways. I'd just get a beating.

ティーゲルもマグも屈強だから、少々殴られたり噛みつかれたとしてもそうそう死にはしないだろう. 店の方では、止めようとするも、大して効果はないし、周りがケンカは酒場の華とばかりに騒ぐものだからいっこうに静まる気配を見せない. まったくあきれ返る. いつまでもこんなくだらない争いをしている村なんて捨てて、新しい世界に飛び出したい. 俺は、飛行機に乗って、外世界に飛び出している自分を想像しながら、ぐいとジョッキを飲み干した.

Both Tiegel and Mag are built pretty sturdily, so I figure a little beating and biting isn't going to kill them. Even if the barkeep would like to stop them, it's not really a big deal, you'll get fights in a tavern like weeds in a garden, so you're unlikely to see all the ruckus in the bar die down at once. Jeez it's really astonishing. I'd gladly leave this village and all this pointless fighting behind me and fly off to that new world. As I picture myself flying off to the other world, I gulp down what's left in my stein.

【リック】「お前ら、いい加減にしろよー」 酒もなくなり、そろそろ殴り合いを見ているのもイヤになってくる. 【縞尻尾１】「ぐ・・・ぬ・・・ぅ」 【ティーゲル】「くふぅ・・・く・・・」 結局、しばらく経って、お互いが立っていられなくなってケンカが終わった. ティーゲルもマグもぶっ倒れ、店のテーブルも椅子もぶっ壊れた. 本当にすまない、と謝ると、 修理代さえきちんと出してくれれば、ケンカなんて、派手でいい、 と樽のように太い腕のあちらこちらに古傷を抱えたマスターが言った.

Rick: "You two, stop fooling around already-!" Since I've run out of beer, I'm also losing my interest in watching them fight. Striped Tail 1: "Guh... nuh... uh" Tiegel: "Phew... Nng..." It's taken a while, but finally none of them can stand up anymore, so the fight is over.

Tiegel and Mag are completely trashed, just like the bar's chairs and tables. "I'm really sorry" and "Please excuse this" and "As long as you pay the repair costs, a fight isn't bad at all" I hear the barkeep say. He's as round as a barrel with arms full of old scars.

俺はティーゲルのボーナスとやらを懐から探って、店の修理代だとマスターに差し出した. その後の縞尻尾の連中はどうなったか知らないけれど、俺は２人を引きずって街の噴水の前まで来た. こんなケンカばかりの街が嫌いだから外世界に行く、なんてちょっとカッコ悪い. けれど、俺は逃げ出す訳じゃなく、その向こうに新しい世界を見つけにいくんだ. 父さんと同じように. 父さんは、どんな気持ちで飛行機を飛ばしたんだろうか. 俺は、白く輝く月を見上げて、 【リック】「いつか、俺の夢のために　卑しく空を侵すかもしれないけれど　その時は、どうか大目に見てください」 と、珍しく手のひらを合わせながら、お祈りをしてみた.

I search Tiegel's breast pocket for his bonus money and hand it to the barkeep to pay for the damages. I don't know what the striped tails are going to do about this. I just leave the bar, dragging the two behind me until I reach the town's fountain. Leaving this place I hate to go to a new world makes me look like a coward. But it's not like I'm running away, I'm going there to explore that new world. Just like my father. I wonder how dad felt as he took off back then. I look up to the white moon in the night sky.

Rick: "One day, to fulfill my dream, I will have to break into your sky, when that time comes, please turn a blind eye to it." I put my hands against each other and say a prayer, something I rarely do.