＜再会＞ Reunion

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 * 汁 Except for the silly-sounding "Midel in the middle" [天: I'm afraid that's the reason it's called Mid(d)le ^^""] bit and the "capital" issue (which sounds fine to me, though), this has my seal of approval.
 * 天 No objections from me
 * 味 I'm good with this
 * 月:-nodnod-
 * 味: A few minor changes with my re-read, feel free to take it or leave it ^^;

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いつものように、魚を捕った帰り道のことだった. 今日は、大きめの魚が釣れたから、こういうのは干物にしておこうなんて思いながら、丘にさしかかった時だ. 【？？？】「よぉ、リック. 元気か？」 どこか聞き覚えのある、懐かしい声. 子供の頃、よく聞いていた声が背中越しに聞こえた.

I'm on my way back from catching fish as usual. I got a couple of really big ones today, so as I approach the hill I wonder if I should dry them in the sun.

???: "Yo, Rick. How's it going?"

I hear a voice from somewhere, I know that voice. How long has it been? A voice that I used to hear a lot as a child, it came from behind me.

[L.W.: I would change that first line of text there so that it says "so as I approach the hill I wonder [whether/if] I should dry them in the sun." [if is much more common then whether]]

【リック】「えぇ！？　ザイル？」 【ザイル】「元気そうだな」 【リック】「うん、元気だよ. どうしたの？　久しぶりだなぁ」 【ザイル】「なに、久々にバストークに　戻ってきただけさ」

Rick: "Eeh!? Zail! "

Zail: "Fit as a fiddle, I see." ''[天: Don't know if that carries the right feeling here. If not change it to "you look well" or something]''

Rick: "Sure am. What are you doing here? Jeez it's been ages."

Zail: "I just kind of felt like seeing Bastok again after being gone for so long."

ザイルは、俺より年上で、子供の頃はまるで俺の兄さんのような人だった. バストークでは裕福な家の生まれで、俺みたいな貧乏な生まれのガキ とも分け隔てなく接してくれていた. ザイルが大人になり、大学へ行くためミデルに住むようになってからはほとんど会うことはなくなっていた.

Zail is a few years older than me; when we were little he was somewhat like my big brother. Even though he was born into a wealthy family he hung out with poor kids like me, as if it didn't matter. When he grew up he moved to Midel so he could attend the academy, and we really couldn't see each other that much anymore. [味: Just took the "s" out of "each others" and changed "at all" to "that much", unless it's implied they didn't see each other at all, in which case it could be phrased another way][天: No, "that much" is closer to the original here.]

そして、ミデルを出て、王都の方へ移ってからは、俺がザイルのことを考える事なんてなくなっていた. 突然、現れたザイル. 俺が知っていた頃のザイルとは顔もまるで違うのに、声を聞き、顔を見た瞬間そこにあった数年間の隔たりは最初からなかったかのように どこかに消えていた.

I haven't thought about him much lately, since he left Midel to live in the capital. ''[天: "Capital" doesn't quite do it I'm afraid. "王都" royal-capital? I don't know, any ideas?]'' ''[味:Major city, possibly hub city? Busy city..? Let me know how it's being used] [天: Well, the original reads "King-Capital" literally.]''

The Zail that is standing in front of me now is a completely different person from the boy I knew back then, but when I see his face and hear his voice now it's like the many years that we haven't seen each other are erased in an instant.

[L.W.: I would state that first line "I haven't thought about him much lately, since he left Midel to live in the capital"]

【リック】「その服は、法王庁の士官？」 【ザイル】「ああ. ミデルで大学を卒業した後　試験を受けてな. 今回から、ミデルの法王庁に　配属されたんだよ」【リック】「すごいなぁ. だって、法王庁士官には　随分難しい試験があるって聞いた　ことあるよ」 【ザイル】「ははは. まあ、随分苦労したよ. おかげで、俺は故郷の平和を　守ることができる」

Rick: "Those clothes... You're an officer of the Holy Order?"

Zail: "Yeah. After finishing the academy in Midel, I went for the entrance exam. From now on I am a member of the branch in Midel."

Rick: "Wow. But I heard the officer exam of the Order is really tough."

Zail: "Hahaha. Well, it was a real pain. But thanks to that I can finally protect the peace in our homeland."

[L.W.: Okay there are two things you can do to fix the second sentence of the second line of speech, A. Change the "From now on" to something like "Luckily for you" or B. change after the "from now on" to say something to the effect of " I am a member of the (Midel Branch/ branch in Midel)(!)" A is more of a friendly/playful tone whereas B. is more of him being proud of his work]

バストークは、ミデルを中心とし、隣村のザパトと合わせてミデル地方とされている. ミデルを守るということは、バストークも守ると言うことだ. 正義感が強く、頭の良いザイルは適任だと思った.

【ザイル】「きれいだな. この景色は、俺がガキの頃から　変わらないな」 【リック】「俺もそう思うよ. ここからは、大陸の外がよく見えるし」 【ザイル】「リック. お前、もしかして　まだ外の世界に行きたい、なんて　言ってるのか？」 【リック】「え？　言ってるよ？　だって、俺の夢だもの」

Bastok and Zapat, with Midel in the center form the greater Midel area ''[汁: that sounds like a silly pun. we should figure a different way to say it] [味: Bastok, with Midel in the center?] [天: Center sounds good. Seriously I didn't even notice this O.o"] [汁: okay, switched to "center" and jiggled ordering and languages to make more idiomatic]''. To protect Midel also means protecting Bastok. Zail, with his strong sense of justice and his keen mind, is perfect for that job in my opinion.

Zail: "It's so beautiful, isn't it? The scenery hasn't changed one bit since I was a child."

Rick: "Yeah, you're right. From here you got a great view of the outside of our continent."

Zail: "Rick, do you mean to tell me that you still want to go to the outside world?"

Rick: "Eh? Of course I do! It's my dream after all."

[L.W.: First line: Unless all three are in the center that should be a with rather than an and. Line 1 of speech: I would change that to "one bit". 2nd Line of speech, second sentence : I think "of the outside of our continent" sounds better.]

昔、ザイルと遊んでいた頃にもここに立って、外世界の話をしたことがある. 父さんが何をしているかも知らなかった頃から、俺は外世界に興味を持っていた. 血は争えないようだ.

【ザイル】「外世界に興味を持つなんて、　空に対する冒涜だ. 俺達が恵みの空を飛ぼうなんて　卑しいとは思わないか」 昔も今も、ザイルは同じように答えた. 信心深いザイルは、子供の頃と同じようにそう言って俺を諫めた. 【リック】「空には感謝するけどね. それとこれとは別さ. 俺はあの雲の向こうに夢を見てるんだ」

Long ago, while playing with Zail, we stood at this place and spoke about the outside world. Even before I found out what father was actually doing, I have always had an interest in that world. It's in our blood I guess.

Zail: "Having an interest in the outside world implies the wish to break into the sky. That is blasphemy! Flying through the gracious sky is a disgraceful wish that we should not even think about!"

What he's saying now is the same as back then. Zail is deeply religious and used to warn me like that even when we were still kids.

Rick: "I am grateful to the sky, but you see, this and that are two different things. In my dreams I see the place beyond those clouds."

[L.W.: 1rst Line: maybe "I have always had an interest in that world" 3rd Line: I would suggest "What he is saying now is just the same as back then." and I would take out the still. 4th Line: I would take out the "you see" and remove the comma]

【ザイル】「確か、ガキの頃もそんなことを　言ってたな」 ザイルは、鼻の下をこすりながらくくくっと笑った. 【ザイル】「ま、そういう考え方が、人間を　進歩に導いていると思う. 俺がどう考えているかと、　お前がどう考えているかは別ってことだな」

昔のザイルは、俺が『ごめん』と言うまで口を酸っぱくして説教を続けた. あの頃のザイルとは少し違うんだろう. 【ザイル】「ただ、俺は、お前に、お前の親父さんと　同じ道は歩ませたくない」

Zail: "I knew it, you're still saying the same things you did as a child."

He rubs the underside of his nose and laughs lightly.

Zail: "Well, I think that way of thinking is what makes mankind advance. No matter what I think about it, I do understand how you feel."

He used to say "Sorry", close his mouth bitterly and continue his preaching. It seems like he really has changed since back then.

Zail: "But, I just don't want to see you go down the same road your father did."

[L.W. 3rd Line: "It seems like he really has changed since back then" I think would be better. 4th line: "But, I just don't want" I think would sound better]

【リック】「父さん？」 【ザイル】「お前の親父さんは、外世界の研究をしていて　法王庁に逮捕された. そして処分された. 知っているだろ？」 【リック】「そりゃ、知ってるよ」 ザイルは、法王庁に残されている事実しか知らないみたいだった.

【ザイル】「俺は見ての通り、今は法王庁の士官だ. お前を逮捕、なんてことはしたくない」 【リック】「見逃してくれればいいだけじゃないか. 俺一人くらいなんて、どうせ　わかんないでしょ？」 俺は笑いながらそう言った.

Rick: "My father?"

Zail: "He studied the outside world and was arrested and punished by the Holy Order. You know that, don't you?"

Rick: "Yeah, sure I know that."

It seems like Zail only knows what the Order told him.

Zail: "As you can see I am now an officer of the Holy Order. I don't want to have to arrest you."

Rick: "Can't you just look away then? I'm just one person, who's gonna find out?"

I laugh as I say that.

[L.W. 2nd line: "You do know that your father studied the outside world and was arrested for it and punished by the Holy Order, don' t you?" 6th line 2nd sentence: Dropping the "about it anyways" I think would sound better]

【ザイル】「俺だって、腐っても士官だ. そんなことはできん」 少しだけ、そう言ったザイルの目が光っていた.

【リック】「たとえ、捕まることになっても、　俺はさ・・・」 【ザイル】「いや、その先は言うな. 俺が聞かなければ、お前を逮捕する　ことにはならない」 ザイルは人差し指を俺の口の前に立てた. 俺はそのまま口をつぐんだ.

Zail: "What kind of an officer would that make me? Of course I can't do that!"

For an instant, I can see a gleam in his eyes.

Rick: "But still, even if you catch me, I'll..."

Zail: "Stop, don't speak any further. If I were to hear anymore I would have to arrest you right here."

He holds his index finger in front of my mouth, so I shut up.

【ザイル】「今日明日はバストークの村にいる. 今はミデルの５番街に住んでいるから　たまには顔を見せに来いよな. うまい店を知ってる んだ」 ザイルは指を収めてそう言った. 【リック】「あ、うん. ミデルに行ったら、寄らせてもらうよ」 俺とザイルは別れて、お互いの家に帰っていった.

Zail: "I'll be in Bastok today and tomorrow. I live in Midel, on 5th Street now. Come around and show your face from time to time, ok? I know a great place there."

He takes his finger away as he says that.

Rick: "Ah, alright. I'll show up when I visit Midel, I promise!"

We say goodbye and head back to our homes.

[L.W. 1rst Line: Generally its on rather than in a street]

Finished product
いつものように、魚を捕った帰り道のことだった. 今日は、大きめの魚が釣れたから、こういうのは干物にしておこうなんて思いながら、丘にさしかかった時だ. 【？？？】「よぉ、リック. 元気か？」 どこか聞き覚えのある、懐かしい声. 子供の頃、よく聞いていた声が背中越しに聞こえた.

I'm on my way back from catching fish as usual. I got a couple of really big ones today, so as I approach the hill I wonder if I should dry them in the sun.

???: "Yo, Rick. How's it going?"

I hear a voice from somewhere, I know that voice. How long has it been? A voice that I used to hear a lot as a child, it came from behind me.

【リック】「えぇ！？　ザイル？」 【ザイル】「元気そうだな」 【リック】「うん、元気だよ. どうしたの？　久しぶりだなぁ」 【ザイル】「なに、久々にバストークに　戻ってきただけさ」

Rick: "Eeh!? Zail! "

Zail: "Fit as a fiddle, I see."

Rick: "Sure am. What are you doing here? Jeez it's been ages."

Zail: "I just kind of felt like seeing Bastok again after being gone for so long."

ザイルは、俺より年上で、子供の頃はまるで俺の兄さんのような人だった. バストークでは裕福な家の生まれで、俺みたいな貧乏な生まれのガキ とも分け隔てなく接してくれていた. ザイルが大人になり、大学へ行くためミデルに住むようになってからはほとんど会うことはなくなっていた.

Zail is a few years older than me; when we were little he was somewhat like my big brother. Even though he was born into a wealthy family he hung out with poor kids like me, as if it didn't matter. When he grew up he moved to Midel so he could attend the academy, and we really couldn't see each other that much anymore.

そして、ミデルを出て、王都の方へ移ってからは、俺がザイルのことを考える事なんてなくなっていた. 突然、現れたザイル. 俺が知っていた頃のザイルとは顔もまるで違うのに、声を聞き、顔を見た瞬間そこにあった数年間の隔たりは最初からなかったかのように どこかに消えていた.

I haven't thought about him much lately, since he left Midel to live in the capital

The Zail that is standing in front of me now is a completely different person from the boy I knew back then, but when I see his face and hear his voice now it's like the many years that we haven't seen each other are erased in an instant.

【リック】「その服は、法王庁の士官？」 【ザイル】「ああ. ミデルで大学を卒業した後　試験を受けてな. 今回から、ミデルの法王庁に　配属されたんだよ」【リック】「すごいなぁ. だって、法 王庁士官には　随分難しい試験があるって聞いた　ことあるよ」 【ザイル】「ははは. まあ、随分苦労したよ. おかげで、俺は故郷の平和を　守ることができる」

Rick: "Those clothes... You're an officer of the Holy Order?"

Zail: "Yeah. After finishing the academy in Midel, I went for the entrance exam. From now on I am a member of the branch in Midel."

Rick: "Wow. But I heard the officer exam of the Order is really tough."

Zail: "Hahaha. Well, it was a real pain. But thanks to that I can finally protect the peace in our homeland."

バストークは、ミデルを中心とし、隣村のザパトと合わせてミデル地方とされている. ミデルを守るということは、バストークも守ると言うことだ. 正義感が強く、頭の良いザイルは適任だと思った.

【ザイル】「きれいだな. この景色は、俺がガキの頃から　変わらないな」 【リック】「俺もそう思うよ. ここからは、大陸の外がよく見えるし」 【ザイル】「リック. お前、もしかして　まだ外の世界に行きたい、なんて　言ってるのか？」 【リック】「え？　言ってるよ？　だって、俺の夢だもの」

Bastok and Zapat, with Midel in the center form the greater Midel area. To protect Midel also means protecting Bastok. Zail, with his strong sense of justice and his keen mind, is perfect for that job in my opinion.

Zail: "It's so beautiful, isn't it? The scenery hasn't changed one bit since I was a child."

Rick: "Yeah, you're right. From here you got a great view on the outside of our continent."

Zail: "Rick, do you mean to tell me that you still want to go to the outside world?"

Rick: "Eh? Of course I do! It's my dream after all."

昔、ザイルと遊んでいた頃にもここに立って、外世界の話をしたことがある. 父さんが何をしているかも知らなかった頃から、俺は外世界に興味を持っていた. 血は争えないようだ.

【ザイル】「外世界に興味を持つなんて、　空に対する冒涜だ. 俺達が恵みの空を飛ぼうなんて　卑しいとは思わないか」 昔も今も、ザイルは同じように答えた. 信心深いザイルは、子供の頃と同じようにそう言って俺を諫めた. 【リック】「空には感謝するけどね. それとこれとは別さ. 俺はあの雲の向こうに夢を見てるんだ」

Long ago, while playing with Zail, we stood at this place and spoke about the outside world. Even before I found out what father was actually doing, I have always had an interest in that world. It's in our blood I guess.

Zail: "Having an interest in the outside world implies the wish to break into the sky. That is blasphemy! Flying through the gracious sky is a disgraceful wish that we should not even think about!"

What he's saying now is the same as back then. Zail is deeply religious and used to warn me like that even when we were still kids.

Rick: "I am grateful to the sky, but you see, this and that are two different things. In my dreams I see the place beyond those clouds."

【ザイル】「確か、ガキの頃もそんなことを　言ってたな」 ザイルは、鼻の下をこすりながらくくくっと笑った. 【ザイル】「ま、そういう考え方が、人間を　進歩に導いていると思う. 俺がどう考えているかと、　お前がどう考えているかは別ってことだな」

昔のザイルは、俺が『ごめん』と言うまで口を酸っぱくして説教を続けた. あの頃のザイルとは少し違うんだろう. 【ザイル】「ただ、俺は、お前に、お前の親父さんと　同じ道は歩ませたくない」

Zail: "I knew it, you're still saying the same things you did as a child."

He rubs the underside of his nose and laughs lightly.

Zail: "Well, I think that way of thinking is what makes mankind advance. No matter what I think about it, I do understand how you feel."

He used to say "Sorry", close his mouth bitterly and continue his preaching. It seems like he really has changed since back then.

Zail: "But, I just don't want to see you go down the same road your father did."

【リック】「父さん？」 【ザイル】「お前の親父さんは、外世界の研究をしていて　法王庁に逮捕された. そして処分された. 知っているだろ？」 【リック】「そりゃ、知ってるよ」 ザイルは、法王庁に残されている事実しか知らないみたいだった.

【ザイル】「俺は見ての通り、今は法王庁の士官だ. お前を逮捕、なんてことはしたくない」 【リック】「見逃してくれればいいだけじゃないか. 俺一人くらいなんて、どうせ　わかんないでしょ？」 俺は笑いながらそう言った.

Rick: "My father?"

Zail: "He studied the outside world and was arrested and punished by the Holy Order. You know that, don't you?"

Rick: "Yeah, I sure know that."

It seems like Zail only knows what the Order told him.

Zail: "As you can see I am now an officer of the Holy Order. I don't want to have to arrest you."

Rick: "Can't you just look away then? I'm just one person, who's gonna find out?"

I laugh as I say that.

【ザイル】「俺だって、腐っても士官だ. そんなことはできん」 少しだけ、そう言ったザイルの目が光っていた.

【リック】「たとえ、捕まることになっても、　俺はさ・・・」 【ザイル】「いや、その先は言うな. 俺が聞かなければ、お前を逮捕する　ことにはならない」 ザイルは人差し指を俺の口の前に立てた. 俺はそのまま口をつぐんだ.

Zail: "What kind of an officer would that make me? Of course I can't do that!"

For an instant, I can see a sparkling in his eyes.

Rick: "But still, even if you catch me, I'll..."

Zail: "Stop, don't speak any further. If I were to hear anymore I would have to arrest you right here."

He holds his index finger in front of my mouth, so I shut up.

【ザイル】「今日明日はバストークの村にいる. 今はミデルの５番街に住んでいるから　たまには顔を見せに来いよな. うまい店を知ってる んだ」 ザイルは指を収めてそう言った. 【リック】「あ、うん. ミデルに行ったら、寄らせてもらうよ」 俺とザイルは別れて、お互いの家に帰っていった.

Zail: "I'll be in Bastok today and tomorrow. I live in Midel, on 5th Street now. Come around and show your face from time to time, ok? I know a great place there."

He takes his finger away as he says that.

Rick: "Ah, alright. I'll show up when I visit Midel, I promise!"

We say goodbye and head back to our homes.